restless: an excerpt from Sleep Away
Laying on the ground, looking at the sky and counting clouds, her eyes matched the grass. The park had always been Heather's favorite place to go when she wanted to clear her head. On her twelfth birthday, Heather's parents had given her two wheels, a green Schwinn Frontier Mountain Bike. Since then, she had biked to the park every day after school just to lay on the grass and sometimes, fall asleep and dream. After about 27, she lost count of the white bodies above her. At that moment, she would have given anything to be able to close her eyes and rest, but that was nothing but wishful thinking. This was the fifth day in a row that Heather had come to the park to try and fall asleep like she used to when she was younger...
Heather pedaled down the sidewalk with a swiftness unmatched. Her destination was the only thing on her mind.
*not finished yet - a work in progress*
Laying on the ground, looking at the sky and counting clouds, her eyes matched the grass. The park had always been Heather's favorite place to go when she wanted to clear her head. On her twelfth birthday, Heather's parents had given her two wheels, a green Schwinn Frontier Mountain Bike. Since then, she had biked to the park every day after school just to lay on the grass and sometimes, fall asleep and dream. After about 27, she lost count of the white bodies above her. At that moment, she would have given anything to be able to close her eyes and rest, but that was nothing but wishful thinking. This was the fifth day in a row that Heather had come to the park to try and fall asleep like she used to when she was younger...
Heather pedaled down the sidewalk with a swiftness unmatched. Her destination was the only thing on her mind.
*not finished yet - a work in progress*
posted by sean harrison at 10:35 AM
1 Comments:
Nice opening. I like the pacing of this one. Notice detail and the way in which Heather stands out among the details.
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